（1）17分。此篇作文紧扣主题，基本覆盖所有要点；语言错误影响了部分意思的表达，但多数句子基本正确；基本达到预期写作目的。故列为第三档，给出17分。

（2）语言方面：此篇作文句子较流畅，但是出现多处简单的语法错误。

①Three years ago,this high school was destroyed by earthquake.The buildings and the playground were turn ruins.这两个句子中，earthquake前缺少冠词，turn应改为过去分词turned,且后面应加上介词into,调整为Three years ago,this high school was destroyed by the earthquake.The buildings and the playground were turned into ruins.

②The playground more larger than before.这句话中缺少系动词，并且more和larger不能同时出现，应改为The playground is bigger than before.

③The students are enjoy playing game in the playground.这句话应改为The students are enjoying playing games in the playground.

④It help the school rebuilt and give the promise to the students.这句话中，时态应为一般过去时，且rebuilt为过去分词，此处应用原形，可改为It helped the school rebuild and gave the promise to the students.

⑤Though the power of earthquake is big,the government is devoted into many sources into the school education and construction.这句话中，the government is devoted into many sources表达不准确，且用词不当，应优化为Although earthquakes possess immense power,the government has dedicated considerable resources to school education and construction.

⑥To sum up,the great changes that have taken place in the school.这句话应删除the和that,改为To sum up,great changes have taken place in the school.

⑦I hope they can happy forever.这句话中，情态动词can后不可直接跟形容词happy,应在can后面加上be,调整为I hope they can be happy forever.

此外，单词拼写也有错误：

①However,Nowaday,the building are built and very beautiful.这句话中，Nowaday缺少字母s且首字母应小写，应改为nowadays;building后应加s。

②The most important is that the sport of the people.这句话中，应把sport改成spirit,同时删除that。

在此篇作文中，也可以多采用一些长难句，并且用到的词汇应该符合相应学段，有一些句子需要优化，例如：Facing the beautiful school,the teachers and the students are happy with smile face.可改为In the face of such a scene,the students and teachers are very relieved and happy.

内容方面：题目中要求的某中学地震后三年的变化、发生变化的原因和感想都有呈现，但还有优化的空间，如写三年来的变化时，师生的精神面貌方面可以增加一些细节描写，句式和用词都可以更加灵活多样。例如：The disaster brought with it a sense of unity and resilience that has become a defining characteristic of our school community.The teachers,with their unwavering dedication,have inspired their students to persevere and excel academically.The students,in turn,have shown remarkable resilience and a positive attitude towards learning,overcoming the psychological scars brought by the earthquake.

篇章结构方面：作文分为三段，结构格式还是较为规整的，但是层次感不足，可以先在第一段列举一些地震带来的巨大影响，以及政府在震后的一些举措；第二段写学生在新的设施里进行的学习活动等，指出他们的心情与之前相比有何不同，体现出对比；最后一段表达出感想和期许。

I.Teaching contents

It is a poem about the interaction between the poet and nature.It introduces some beautiful scenes like trees,grass,dewdrop,sun,sea and so on.This poem is close to students' daily life,and their sense of loving nature will be easily triggered.

Ⅱ.Teaching objectives

(1)Students can read the poem fluently and read the new words “softness,fragrance,summit,thunder,rhythm,faintness,dewdrop,strength,soar”correctly.

(2)Students can feel the charming of nature and arouse their awareness of protecting environment.

(3)Students can analyze the verse and admire the rhythm and rhetoric in it,and then give advice on how to protect nature.

(4)Students can learn to read a poem with the strategy of emotional reading.

Ⅲ Teaching key and difficult points

(1)Key point

Help students understand the meaning of images according to the verse.

(2)Difficult point

Guide students to utilize their skills like continuous reading,rhythmic reading and emotional reading.

IV.Main steps

Step 1 Lead-in(3 mins)

At the beginning of the class,the teacher will show a picture of natural scenery and ask some questions:What can you see in the picture?How do you feel about it?Then some volunteers will be invited to share their answers.After that,the teacher will make corresponding comments on students' answers and show the topic of this lesson.

(Justification:The picture is vivid and interesting,which can arouse students' interest in the teaching activity.Meanwhile,it can also introduce the topic today naturally.)

Step 2 Pre-reading(8 mins)

(1)New knowledge teaching

With the help of pictures and videos,the teacher will guide students to understand the meaning and usage of the new words,including “softness,fragrance,summit,thunder, rhythm,faintness,dewdrop,strength,soar”.

(2)Prediction

Before reading,the teacher will organize students to predict what this poem is mainly about.Some hints will be provided to help them.

Hint 1:Words just referred to.

Hint 2:Title of this material—And My Heart Soars.

Hint 3:The picture in the textbook.

(Justification:The above activities can help students recognize the new words,remove the barriers,and therefore lay the foundation for the next step of“reading”.)

Step 3 While-reading (20 mins)

(1)Extensive reading

The teacher will ask students to read the poem quickly and check their predictions.After that,the teacher will read the poem emotionally and invite several students to imitate.Then students should tell their feelings about this poem.

(2)Intensive reading

Students will be required to read the poem again and answer the following questions.

Q1:How many scenes can you see in this poem?

Q2:Which part do you like most and why?

Q3:Why dose the poet say“Speaks to me”so many times?

Q4:What does the poet feel?

(3)Reading with emotion

The teacher will guide students to read the poem with the right rhythm and summarize the rhythm and rhetoric used in this poem.

(Justification:In the process of completing reading tasks at different levels,students can understand the content and certain details of the poem,and be familiar with the rhythm and rhetoric.Their reading skills will also be improved.)

Step 4 Post-reading(5 mins)

Students need to work in groups to discuss their feelings and the experiences they have been through in nature.Several minutes will be given.When time's up,some students will be invited to share their results.Then the teacher will make comment son students' performance

(Justification:Group activities provide students with the opportunity to apply what they have learned to practical use,improve their comprehensive language skills,boost their confidence in learning English,and enhance their sense of teamwork.Besides,they will cherish beautiful nature more.)

Step 5 Summary and homework (4 mins)

(1)Summary

Students will summarize what they have learned in this class and express their feelings about this poem.The teacher will give supplements if necessary and remind students to protect our nature.

(2)Homework

Interview some friends about their favorite poems.Try to remember some details and share them with the class next time.

(Justification:Summary can help students develop good habits and deepen the impression of the new knowledge they have learned.Homework can help students explore more knowledge and information actively.)